英语写作修改：Self Employment - 自我雇佣
Self employment could bring many advantages. One of the advantages of being self-employed is that the profit the business makes belongs to the owner. If the self-employed person succeeds in business, he has the chance to earn a great deal of money. The profit earned is the reward for the owner’s effort, ability and creativity. Thus, a second advantage is that a person’s intelligence and abilities have a direct effect on the earnings. A third advantage of being self-employed is that a person can control his working hours. While not all self-employed people are completely free, most of them have more control over this area than the salaried people.
Self-employment has many advantages. One benefit of being self-employed is that the owner gets all the profit generated by his or business. So, if the business is a success, the self-employed person stands to make a great deal of money. This is the reward for the owner’s effort, ability, and creativity.
Additionally, a self-employed person can control his own working hours. To be sure, not all self-employed people can keep flexible schedules, but most of them have more control over this area of their life than salaried employees and wage-earners.
“Has advantages” instead of “bring advantages”。“One of the advantages”，“advantage”字重复。“Thus, a second advantage is that” – 既然用“thus”，说明这不是一个并列的概念，不是第一第二。后边就用“additionally”。Salaried是白领雇员，wage earners是体力工人。
However, being self-employed is not without problems. First, being one’s own boss places the responsibility directly on that individual shoulders. Everyone has some weaknesses in a certain aspects. These weaknesses will affect how successful a self-employed person is. Second, though the self-employed can earn considerable profits with a successful business, losses can force them out of business and sometimes, place them in debt. A third disadvantage concerns income security. Self-employed people have no guaranteed wage. Their earnings can vary greatly, depending on business conditions. Salaried people, however, can generally count on continued earnings.
However, self-employment is not without problems. Being one’s own boss places great responsibility on one’s own shoulders. First, everyone has certain weaknesses, and these shortcomings may very well determine the success or failure of a self-employed person. Secondly, although self-employment can potentially lead to great earnings, failure of one’s own business can easily drive a self-employed person out of work and place them in debt. Thirdly, there is the issue of income security. Self-employed people have no guaranteed wages. Their earnings can vary greatly, depending on business conditions. Those who work for salaries or wages, however, can generally count on continued payments.
In addition, salaried people often enjoy fringe benefits that mean greater peace of mind. One of these benefits may be insurance paid for by the employer that continues the employee’s salary in the event of sickness or accident while many self-employed people do not have such protection.
Moreover, salaried people often enjoy fringe benefits, which mean greater peace of mind. One of these benefits is the insurance paid by the employer so that workers will continue to be compensated in the event of illnesses or accidents. Many self-employed people has no such protection.